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Kovu
09-13-2006, 07:25 PM
Topic:
There is something about Disneyland that makes everyone become like a child again.

Introduction:

There I was with my family at Disneyland, the happiest place in the world. While we were waiting in line to enter the park, I felt like a normal teenager waiting to get into another clich? theme park. As soon as I passed through the gate though a feeling came over me. It was a feeling of peace, excitement and adventure but at the same time it felt eerie because all the worries of a teenager were gone. I was in the happiest place in the world and my only job was to have fun.
I walked down Main Street U.S.A. and when I reached the hub, I could see Sleeping Beauty?s Castle. The castle has been standing tall since 1955 and really is the most famous landmark in all of Disneyland. Once I stepped on the drawbridge I felt like I was going back in time. As if at any moment I could see a knight riding by on a horse. We then spent the day going from Fantasyland to Frontierland to Adventureland to Tomorrowland enjoying all the rides. My most favorite ride is Pirates of the Caribbean. It is way too much fun.

The next day we went to Disney?s California Adventure. It is such a cool park. I went on most of the rides. The California Screamin is great fun but the whole day I was keeping my eye on the Twilight Zone Tower of Terror. I wanted to go on that ride so badly but I was scared. Finally I said to my self ?You can do it?. All the way through the line my knees were shaking out of control. Up, up you go and then it?s like a hole in the earth opens up and you are sucked into it. I think your stomach actually ends up in your mouth and I can tell you that I was never so happy to get off a ride in my entire life.
We went on a few more rides and I knew we would be leaving soon. I began to feel that magical feeling slipping away. When you?re in Disneyland you are free to be silly, excited, scared and happy all at the same time without anyone putting pressure on you to conform or teasing you. As I was leaving the Magic Kingdom, I knew all the pressures of a regular teenager were back.

I would like to know what you think about my story.

Think_Tink132
09-13-2006, 07:42 PM
its good....in the beginning i felt a different feeling inside of me, then i came back to myself in the 2nd part....it was good though!

PeoplemoverMatt
09-13-2006, 10:05 PM
If that's the assigned length, then you've got a winner there.

-- PMM :cool:

Jen-Ness
09-14-2006, 04:13 AM
Looking good...